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aFa Dance Short Shory Challenge

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Latest challenge has been issued by Frank from A Frank Angle.  You see, back in May, he wrote his first attempt at a short story (a fine job indeed) and his ending left his readers in all sorts of states!  He thought it would be a grand idea to ask said readers to rewrite the ending in 75 words or less.  Well, as one who cannot ignore such a summons, here is my two cents’ worth!

The music starts – its tempo and rhythms define the dance. He approaches her table, and extends an inviting hand. She accepts. They take to the floor. He offers a hand and a frame. Again, she accepts, but looks away while in hold as if to say, “I’ll dance – but I’m not interested.”

They move to the music’s sharp, fiery rhythms that are intertwined with sensuality. Their eyes continue gazing in opposite directions to avoid a visual connection – yet, their bodies touch.

They dance – they move – sometimes slow – sometimes fast – but always sharp and to rhythm.

He rolls her out – they flick in unison. He tugs to roll her back into his arms. She shrugs him off by returning to hold with her head turned away. Their steps continue.

He steps back – a lunge – a corté. She steps forward and raises her leg against his, and slowly moves it downward as a caress. He notices – she’s got his attention. As he returns her to upright, their eyes connect through a glimpse – yet each looks away.

The pace seeming hastens. The musical beat remains steady. Their moves remain sharp. Their eyes are starting to communicate to the other through glances.

She leans her body into him and her head is no longer facing away. They lock their eyes for the first time, and her eyes and face speak to him then. She places her head on his chest.

The normally sharp fans are now slow and smooth – yet still to the music’s rhythm. As she turns, his right hand slides naturally along her sleek frame. He notices the curvature of her hips. His head is not as high as he looks toward her with hopes of connecting again.

To him, her face displays desire. Her eyes are closed, but only she knows why. They are now in another place. To him, they are in the midst of passion. To her, she is the seductress who has succumbed to his fantasy.

He responds to the music’s fire with 8 fast steps down the floor. He rolls out as before, but on her return, she is close – and her right hand slowly caresses his face. The music ends.

He walks her back to her table, flushed and bright-eyed, and raises her hand to his lips.  “Until next time”, he whispers, and walks away.

She shakes her head and sits down to catch her breath and is startled by her boyfriend’s voice.  “So, really, there is nothing going on between you two, right?   Sure as hell didn’t look like it to me.  Do you have something to tell me?”

So… I leave you with a little tango!

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  2. Seems like steam was arisin’ to the dismay of the boyfriend (whose appearance surprised me) … thumbs up!

    Because you were one of the naysayers of my original ending, 😉 I hope you approved of my alternative. Good morning … Shall we tango today?

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