Yes, it is Wednesday, so that means Friday Fictioneers time! Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, artist, writer, patient hostess, has chosen our very own c.e. Ayr’s photo…
Don’t ask me why I went where I did but, I, ahem, went down a different path this week…
Should you wish to join in on our crazy adventure, please click on Rochelle’s link for the hows and whats. If you wish to read other participants’, just click on the blue frog below!
Got some creative crit and decided it was well-founded. I re-wrote the story as a result…
Genre: Fiction
Word Count: 100
The Meet-Up
It was supposed to be for a light lunch. Neither was hungry, so they had a drink: water for her, soda for him.
They sat at a table and exchanged pleasantries. He asked questions, his gaze intense and she felt like he was reading more than her words. She felt the tension build and squirmed in discomfort, feeling totally exposed, yet strangely excited.
Before she knew how, he made her feel things she never imagined.
As he left her, dazed, yet lit up, he said: “You’ll see, this will play out in your head all day.”
He was not kidding.
Man! He must have been some kind of guy to do that to her. Some people are easy to read and/or manipulate and then there are those who just like to toy with you. I wonder which camp he is. Pretty good stuff, Dale. 😉
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Thanks, Kent! There are predators out there…
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Why do I think you have the next several hundred words in your head..:)
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Maybe….😉
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All you have to do sometimes is tell people not to think of the colour red for five minutes
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I hear ya…
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Very intriguing, sounds like it was a tiring lunch!
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Methinks it was!
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He sounds a bit freaky, to be honest 🙂
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Doesn’t it?
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Has she been probed?
Never mind, don’t answer that! 😉
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Ha ha ha!!! I won’t! 😜
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Hm, it’s all in the mind, isn’t it? A bit creepy, intriguing, and I love it.
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Good! Glad you liked my creepy, yet intriguing tale, Gabriele!
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Won’t want to have lunch with him.
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Nooo… Not a good idea…
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Speaking as a mere man, I have not the foggiest idea what happened here.
But it was exactly what I had in mind when I took the picture.
Amazing.
PS I love your story, utterly incomprehensible, wonderful, baffling, terrific.
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Good! Just what I wanted!!!
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Fun, fun, fun!!
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Good, good, good!!
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Yes,yes,yes!
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😊😀😁
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Some guy, really dangerous, a traveller perhaps
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Oh, that old technique! Got much better ones now.
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Do ya now?
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who’s this guy? svengali? she better not see him again. :).
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She should definitely stay away…
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Was it something he slipped in her drink ? Most men I know say that they do not know what goes in a woman’s mind even when they look deep into their eyes…so I’m going with the drug theory 🙂
Intriguing piece.
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LOL!! I don’t think he was “most men”…
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Just to have that power for an hour….how much trouble could one get into? Hmm. Interesting to leave our twisted minds to figure out what happens.
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Exactly!!! Go where you wish…😉
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It’s the ultimate temptation.😆
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Yessss
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To me, eerie.
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It is…
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He is such a creepy guy! I feel dirty just reading about him lol
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So he does…
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I wonder if she remembers what she had for lunch? I doubt it!
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I seriously doubt it, even if she had eaten something…
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Dear Dale
I have to wonder what just happened. He sounds somewhere between creepy and wonderful. Well done. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Do let your mind go where it will.. 😉
Thank you (for your help and your comment!) xo
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I don’t believe I’d like to have someone think they could tell what I’m thinking. It sounds definitely like a control issue. He sounds like he has an enormous ego. Well written Dale. You’ve created a fabulous character. He’d make the perfect antagonist in a thriller. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Thank you, Suzanne… I think he falls into that Dominant category…😉
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He sounds too sure of himself. How foolish of her to allow him to do that to her, and yet … there are men who CAN do that sort of thing to women, and women seem spellbound by that.
Great (if a little oblique) take on the prompt.
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Yes, she was foilish. Curiosity and all that! Totally out of left field, I agree!
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Indeed.
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Reblogged this on Hello Creatives Times.
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Thank you!
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You are awesome. 🙂
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Awww… shucks!
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🙂
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No problem. Reblog away!
Thanks for feeling I’m rebloggable!
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You have great blog. Thanks. 🙂
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Thank you! I’m touched!
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So nice of you. Thanks. 🙂
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