Wednesday is here. Mom is totally absorbed in From Silt and Ashes, having already read Please Say Kaddish For Me in two days! She asked me if I had any good books to read. Do I ever! How about our very own hostess’ two first books in the trilogy for which I am desperately waiting for the third? Yes, Rochelle, thanks for taking my mother away from me! Hee Hee Hee… Just kidding.
Lucy Fridkin‘s beautiful image has taken me somewhere I had not intended to go at all. Go figure. To join in, click on Rochelle’s name for the rules and regs. and if you are still too shy to participate but want to read more takes on the photo prompt, please click on the blue frog!
©Lucy Fridkin
What’s Going On In There?
“They say they can hear everything.”
“I don’t know about that, but if they can, should we not be careful of what we say?”
Footsteps approaching.
“Pardon me, Ma’am, I’m so sorry to say there is no hope for him. It would be in his best interest….”
“Shut up, dammit! He might hear you! How can you say such a thing? What’s the matter….”
The voices drifted off and he was left alone with his thoughts.
“I wish I could tell them all will be okay. That It’s what I want. I see nothing but peace and tranquility up ahead.”
Dear Dale,
It took me a couple of reads to get it. Smacked my forehead and said, “D’oh!” Although with the colors of the lines and what’s being said, I don’t think you need the tags at the end of the sentences.
Sorry about your mom, but I’m not taking any responsibility there…well maybe, she says with a wide grin. 😉 😀
Shalom,
Rochelle
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The tags were more his understanding of mood or feeling. I hesitated removing them… maybe if I put them in italics to show it’s him?
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It seems to me that he’s the one hearing them and the mood comes through the conversation. But that’s my take. Perhaps others will see it differently. (In the end it’s your decision, darlin’ 😉 )
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Hmmm..K… I’m taking them out!
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Personally, I think that works much better.
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Thanks, Mentor! xo
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Anytime, young padewan.
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😘
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After reading your conversation with Rochelle, and never seeing the tags, I agree that this piece works just fine without them The colors let me know that different people were speaking. Well done!
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Thank you, Alicia!!
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Well I am colour blind and I don’t know what tags are, so the previous comments leave me baffled.
I did quite like your story…
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Ha ha! That’s the important thing. Glad you did…
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Ah, so much Wim Wenders here.. angels talk. Great work!
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Thank you!
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Thanks so much!!
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Love the last sentence.
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Thank you, Michael
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I think this is very realistic. Those that come back to us repeat these stories over and over again. If it’s a personal story, then I hope it brings you some peace.
Tracey
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Thank you, Tracey, I like to think that it was so…
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you nailed it. what’s the point of being kept alive when you’re suffering.
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Thank you, Plaridel! I most certainly agree!
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I love this. It worked fine for me without any tags. I’m glad though that he did want to go, it would have been a very different story if he’d been trying to tell them he wanted to stay.
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Thank you, Claire. I just couldn’t go there…
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Great take Dale. I feel for the poor person unable to communicate and just wanting to let everyone know he is fine and calm and ready to drift peacefully away. Heartbreaking.
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Awww. Thanks, Iain!
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This story reminds me of when my grandmother passed..I was there so it’s a moment I will never forget. Life is precious, let’s enjoy 🙂
thanks Dale 🙂
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Hey Early Bird! Yes, it so is! Thank you, Gi! 😘
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I never saw the tags but it works very well as it is now. Brings a great sense of his calmness and everyone else’s fears and worries.
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Thank you, Michael. So glad it does
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This made me shiver a bit. To be lying there, hearing everything, unable to speak… he seems at peace with it all, anyway.
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Me too! But maybe it was time and the alternative was not the best choice
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Aargh – I was emptying my spam, suddenly saw your name and frantically clicked “not spam” but it was far, far too late. Maybe a comment on my FF? Sorry 😦
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Please, no worries, Alistair! I’ve done it before by.accident too!!!
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I feel the urge to hug somebody now 🙁
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Come on over!!😚
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On the way!
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They could take around me all they want and I wouldn’t hear. Can’t hear it thunder now, I doubt my hearing will improve drastically when I’m on my deathbed.
I did give my father permission to pass on in his last days. He appeared to be in a coma for the last nine days. He stayed with us about another 12 hours after I told him to go ahead.
I’ll catch up with him later.
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I hear ya. I did the same with Mick on.Day 10…
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This moves me. It came through soft and clear.
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Oh! Thank you, Vivi!
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After reading the story and the comments, I’m trying to figure out what is happening.
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He is in a coma and can hear but cannot communicate verbally…
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Darn … why didn’t I think of that! 😉
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Some days the brain doesn’t go there..😉
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If that’s how people truly feel at the end, it gives me peace and hope. Nicely written.
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Thanks, Ansumani. I so hope they do…
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I’ve always heard that someone in that condition can hear even if he seems unaware It must be scary to be that far out of control; Euthanasia is quite evil and it makes it worse if someone that vulnerable hears all that talk under those circumstances.
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Seriously… scary indeed
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Sometimes, it’s us holding onto what we do not want to let go of.
It’s our own need to love them forever and not feel the pain if they don’t stay. Beuatifully written …. I loved it, Dale.
Have a wonderful weekend.
Isadora 😎
p.s. I always smile when I come to your blog. The bright yellow sunflowers are lovely. 🌻
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Oh thank you so much, Isadora. Sunflowers are my ultimate favourites! The fact there was only one field in Tuscany with non-dead ones when I was there was a gift!
And I.couldnt agree with you more. It is us holding on…
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🙏🏻
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Very moving and with a sense of tranquility at the end Dale.
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Thanks, Andrea. So glad that was what you felt
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That’s pretty cool, Dale, using colors for different thoughts. Sad story. Nice sentiments.
BTW, if you come to Kansas, you can take all the sunflowers you want. We’re known for them. Why go all that way to Tuscany, right? OK, maybe not, but we DO have sunflowers. Just putting it out there. 😉
Five out of five kernels.
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Ha ha!! Thanks, kind sir.
How.’bout I go to Kansas to visit you and Cuzzin Shelly instead?
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Yes! Well, she lives on the Missouri side, but we are some twenty minutes from each other. Yes, please come! 🙂
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I would love to!!
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I’m relieved that he’s at peace with the idea of going, but how frustrating not being able to say so. Well written, Dale. It’s the sort of story that with one afterwards, while considering all the angles.
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Thank you so much, Sarah. So glad it had that effect!
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I got it just fine, without tags. I understood it as not continuing life support at all costs but letting him go peacefully. It’s sad, moving, and full of love. And maybe it’s true. Let’s hope so…
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Thanks, Gabriele! I love the idea…
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Clearly it works wonderfully without the tags! A sad reality that so many struggle with. Hard decisions and loss, but love the peaceful conclusion. For my work at Hospice, I more often see folks express that, not remorse.
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Thank you, Dawn! So glad you enjoyed!
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I was with my BFF this evening and her father is in his last days. Seems to me you have described them here very well.
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Thank you, Dawn. I like to think they would want to assure us.
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Life is so funny in that with one event it gives one peace but takes the calm if another.
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So true!
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This is an excellent way of telling the story… the POV of the dying person is perfect, and that last line is great.
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Thank you so much, Björn!
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Nothing better than a book that creates an escape! I hope she is still in the armchair, engrossed:).
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She read the two books in two days!!
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Now that’s my kind of gal!
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She read Shogun (1210 pages in 2 days…)
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