First Friday Fictioneers of the Year! Yes, folks, it is Wednesday so, confusing for our Newbies, it means we get our photo for our story, which most of us try to post before Friday. Just to confuse. This wonderful photo that made me scratch my head was provided by Sandra Crook, wonderful author and photographer. Rochelle, from Addicted to Purple, our ever-diligent facilitator, writer, author, wonderful person, sure knows how to pick ’em! I’m no longer indicating my word count because, frankly, I always make sure it stands at exactly 100! 😉 As for the genre… well… let us not give too many hints, eh?
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- Did a little tweaking to clarify this was an exchange between father and daugter…
Thoughts Become Things
What is that incessant grinding sound?
It’s me, thinking! Got such great thoughts you can hear me think!
You are so ridiculous!
No, seriously, my brain is going non-stop: things to do, people to see, places to visit… anything but stay here on this dead-end farm.
There is nothing dead-end here, my dear. We provide necessary food to our neighbours. We are worthy.
Maybe, but it is so boring to me. I’m dying here. Same thing, every day. Same people, every day. All old, nothing new.
He looked at her, eyes filled with sadness. He’d have to let his daughter go.
The contrast between the two is very impressive. You can almost feel the switch from hyperactive to laid-back with each exchange. Well done, Dale.
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Thank you very much, Sandra! So glad you like!
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Great story and a killer title.
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Thank you Neil!!
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Nice dialogue with contrasting points of view. Definitely better if they went their separate ways!
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Yep… I think she’s his daughter…
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I almost went this direction with the prompt and am glad I didn’t – you did an excellent job with your dialogue.
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I felt we were on a similar path!
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Dear Dale,
She doesn’t seem to be cut out to be a farmer’s wife. Sad that he will just let her go. Wonderful dialogue exchange.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I actually think she’s the farmer’s daughter . .
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That does make more sense.
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I should tweak, I think …
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It couldn’t hoit. 😉
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Perfection, Dale. Sometimes one word is all that needs to change. Crisp dialogue and I know who’s delivering it. (My job is complete. 😉 So is yours.)
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks so much, Rochelle! Clarity does go a long way!!
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I saw your comment above.. I think that in some cases the children actually do return.. a taste of the big world might be enough…
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True… and then many not!
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One can hope at least.
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I love it when a story gets one thinking like this one, Dale. It hadn’t dawned on me that she might be the daughter but now that I think about it wives and daughters can have very different perspectives, even if they do grow to become like each other eventually!!! Well done you!
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Enjoyed. Great dialogue.
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Thanks Roger!!
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Sharp, distinct dialogue, that takes the reader back and forth. Love it, Dale! BTW: tried to edit my post, to include your name for #BloggersUnite, but haven’t been able to access edits. Gah! I’ll get it! Still stuck in Newark… hopefully I can fix it and then get on my plane!
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Oh so cool to be included!! Glad you enjoyed…
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So cool that you participated! I got it fixed. 😉
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Yay!!
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And after becoming buds with. Star…don’t forget us little people…😘
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“Fish gotta swim and birds gotta fly …”
In line with the title, Earl Nightingale had a best-selling recording called The Strangest Secret. It’s about some 18 minutes long and you can find it all over Youtube. In it, he describes the secret to success — we become what we think.
In the words of your own brand — “It’s Dale-lightful, it’s Dale-ishus, it’s Dale-ectable, it’s Dale-irious, it’s Dale-LOVELY.” MMMUUUAAA!
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Oh my! Kent!!
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😉
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😆😙😙
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i don’t think he’d let her go because he believes misery loves company. 🙂
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I bet after she’s had her fill of the “world” she’ll come back. Best to let her get it out of her system. And if she stays away then she probably would have had an awful time stuck on the farm anyway. Nice one!
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Thank you, Alistair. Not all are meant for the farming life
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When ones got to go ones got to go. I did. Later the something may pull her back, it did for me. Thanks for the memories.
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Better that he lets her go willingly, then it will always be home to her. I couldn’t wait to get away when I was a teenager but I am glad I came back.
You captured the dynamic perfectly Dale. Nicely told
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Thanks !!
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Great job of showing the different perspectives on the quiet life of a farmer!
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Thank you Debra!
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I left the farm and moved to town at age 18. Three years later I was back in the country, though not trying to make a living by farming. I couldn’t stand the cramped-up life of the city. You can take the redneck out of the country, but you can’t take the country out of the redneck.
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I hear ya, Russell!
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Thoughts indeed do become things.
Love the grinding sound… of thinking.
Randy
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Thank you, Randy! Glad you liked!
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Great dialogue. It’s not working out me thinks… she wants more he doesn’t. A familiar tale well told
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We hope our kids will follow in out footsteps, but that does not always happen, does it?
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Too true Dale, in fact I think that is what happens these days. You don’t see a lot of people in family businesses these days. But sad
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Sadly true…
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This is so well done, Dale. I can just see the sullen daughter’s face … that teenage pout. Such surety in her that things are greener on the other side. Always best to let them go, or they became like caged resentful lionesses, then when they do break free, too much damage is done to the relationship for them to ever want to return.
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So absolutely true, Sarah. Too many times I’ve seen the extremely restricted break free and go wild first chance they get, to disastrous results…
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Oh this is tugged at my heart at the end!
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Thank you, Louise. Sometimes you just have to let go…
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Loved the title and the tale 🙂
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Thanks !!
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That moment in time when you know you have to let them go. Nice one.
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Thank you. Yes. It is best…
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So poignant, I wonder if she’ll ever come back when she realises what she’s lost.
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Who knows? All depends on what she discovers…
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I feel for them both as I have been the daughter and the parent. Good job in 100 words!
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Thank you so much, Dawn!
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I just hope he isnt planning to do away with his daughter!
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No, no. Definitely not…😊
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Phew 😉
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There comes a time when they want to move on and we have to let them go – encourage them to go – and rebuild without them. Lovely tale, Dale – sad but beautifully told
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I couldn’t agree more, Lynn. Thanks so much
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My pleasure 🙂
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Seems like the best choice, nice write!
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Thank you! We have to set them free…
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Hopefully, she will return. Nice dialogue.
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Thanks, Clare! If she’s meant to, she will!
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A lot of rural towns and villages suffer from the loss of their young people and the lack of a way to pass on the traditions of the past.
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Sadly true…
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