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Word count: 100
Genre: Fiction
Sparkles, To Brighten Up the Night
Her mood was black. As black as the night. She was angry at him but mostly at herself for allowing him to treat her like trash. He called her nasty names and she was taken aback. Were the words he threw at her true? Was she really like that? All she had done was answer his question truthfully, with kindness. “Truth hurts,” she thought.
While nursing her wounded soul, she hadn’t noticed the snow falling, sparkling up the night, covering up the dark.
I know who I am. I am none of those things. Those words are his, not mine.
Oh dear, sometimes the tongue lashes out and cuts like a whip. I hate those moments in life where words cannot be taken back and there’s a deep wound left behind. Best they go their separate ways for the night and sleep on things. Maybe when they awake to sunlight sparkling on a white world, things won’t be so bleak and they’ll kiss and make up, or decide to move onto snowy pastures new.
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I think this was a case where his true nature came out and, as a result, shall no longer be allowed in her sacred sanctuary…
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I like that …”her sacred sanctuary”. I’m glad she discovered the true him, and retreated before he utterly destroyed her.
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Thank you! So am I…too many allow themselves to be destroyed by ill-meaning people
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I love a strong character who doesn’t fall victims to the thoughts of others.
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Thanks Joseph! So do I!
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Harsh, unkind words can leave scars that last a lifetime. Believe in yourself and who you are, never let anyone tear you down! My experience has taught me that 🙂 Thank goodness (Dale) for the kind people I have in my life 🙂
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Indeed! Some have to learn the hard way, sadly others are not well-surrounded and, as a result, never learn…
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Yes! Miss Lovely D. Yes, again, again, again.
Winks. Grins. Hugs.
RRR
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Lovely R! Yes! Yes! Yes! We Skype soon? I miss you! xoxo
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Dear Dale,
Love your use of the prompt. Good for her to realize his accusations are false. Time to move on. Wonderful.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Ah that’s so nice to read! Thank you so much!
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A good attitude to have. If they don’t like it, they can look elsewhere.
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Exackery!!
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Well, she shouldn’t have asked him if that dress made her look fat.
And he should have had better sense than to be brutally honest.
Personally, I think they could both use some counseling. CE could clean this mess up in no time, and without any blasted typos either.
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Ha ha….were it such a small thing… he’s better off gone, methinks!
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Exactly, Russell, did you check the size of that bahookie?
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Love the last line. Need to copy it and hang it up on the side of my monitor.
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Ooh. Wow! I’m pleased!
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People are such strange things, they ask for snow and then complain because it’s cold. If he didn’t want to know, he shouldn’t have asked. I’m just glad that she understands that the fault is not hers, that the poison is all his.
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Exactly!! She is a strong woman, that one…
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Thank goodness the quiet of the snow gave her space to contemplate what was going on in this relationship. We do not have to pick up the baggage others try to thrust upon us.
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Exactomundo! So nice when you are secure enough in your own skin to know that
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Both truth and lies hurt, but it’s easier to overcome the pain from lies.
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That’d for sure
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She’s taking back control and not letting him hurt her, good for her!
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Indeed!
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I think he was right to be honest.
She seems over-sensitive.
Neat piece, Dale.
(See, I’ve learned)
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Ahh….well in this case he lashed out at her honesty so maybe he was overly sensitive.
Yes, thank you. Much appreciated.
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It’s great how she manages to move on. These cutting words so often leave a sliver of doubt.
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Isn’t that the truth. She moved on in spite of it!
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Good for her, you wrote a beautiful, uplifting story.
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Thank you. Glad you felt that way!
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“Snow covering up the dark”. Wonderful image for seeing her own truth sparkling within herself.
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Thank you so much, Vivi!!
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You had me at Yessiree, Bob! I could fill this comment box with adjectives, I’m wordy like that, but I’ll just say thanks for making your character refuse to accept [his] words.
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Ha ha!! Thanks, Honie!
She’s a fiery one…
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Finding the truth in the snow – clean and pure and untainted. Lovely work, Dale
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Oh thank you, Lynn!
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My absolute pleasure 🙂
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I LOVE the power & hope in your stories.
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Awww… thank you so much, Louise!
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Glad she realizes that he’s bit right, or that his truth is not hers.
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Exactly! He didn’t like hearing the truth so he lashed out with cruel untruths!
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Darn right honey. His words have no meaning… they are only the product of a damaged soul taking his own pain out on her. She deserves better. Hope she leaves and gets it.
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You bet! No way she was sticking round for more!
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Yay… good for her!
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😎
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This was beautifully written. I love the reference to the words he threw at her. Words can be deadly weapons.
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Thank you so much. Words can go straight for heart and destroy if we let them.
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A dose of nature to pick up the soul … and in this case, hopefully a reality check to get rid of the bozo.
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Right!!
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It’s always good to consider constructive criticism and give it some thought. However this was just lashing out meant to cause pain. No help intended.
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Exactly what it was – a go for the jugular meanness…
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Gee whiz, that is SAD and so terrible. Abuse and scorn. You captured it well, Dale.
Maybe if she met Starman …
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Thank you.
Yes. At least Starman wished no I’ll….and was and hunk to boot!
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Hahaha! Yes, indeedy-do!
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This hit home with me as I was once in that lady’s shoes.
Some of us take a little longer to learn the lesson……..
Thanks for sharing 🙂
– Lisa
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Thanks, Lisa… let’s just say this story was built on memory…
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in the end you have got to believe yourself. thanks for stopping by on my blog
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Indeed, you do!
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This is a really important distinction. Understanding when someone’s harsh words don’t apply is the first step in avoiding an abusive relationship.
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So very true. She is not one who will allow that to happen.
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I like how the snow brightening up the night brings her clarity. She knows his words are lies, that she’s not like he tells her she is.
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Exactly, Amanda! So glad you liked!
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i read somewhere that an ideal relationship would be that of the man who is deaf and the woman who is blind. this story just negates it. 🙂
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Well… that would make for a pretty dull relationship…
Glad it does!
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We all have our dark places. But it is hard when someone is operating out of darkness to be in our own light. Good life lesson there, Dale.
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Thank you so much, Joy!
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Allowing him to treat her like trash.’ Sadly too many women (and probably men!) do allow others to do so. Glad she has the strength to walk away.
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Me too!
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I’m pleased she took her power back in the end. Many, many women don’t and fall prey to men who tear them down to nothing. Powerful write on the prompt, Dale. You finsihed it up with hope for her. Let’s believe she’ll stay strong.
Isadora 😎
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Thank you, Isadora. I think she will indeed!
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Domestic violence is not just physical. Words can hurt and scar more. I see that she has the courage to transcend them.
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Indeed, Subroto…
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Good for her!
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Yes!!
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It can be so easy to turn pain and hurt inward on ourselves. Fake it ’til you make it, sooth yourself and fill that pain with reassurance… you’ve really painted a clear picture of abuse, and inner strength, Dale. Nice job!
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Thank you so much, Dawn! I’m very pro-fake-it-till-you-make-it!
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I like the power of this Dale – that the snow gave her that moment of stillness to realise who she was.
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Thank you so much, Andrea. …and that she listened…
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! Well… that would make for a pretty dull relationship…
Glad it does!
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Been there on that same receiving side. It is miserable. You caught it well. I missed the deadline. Here is what I would have done:
https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2017/10/12/you-dont-know-jack/
Scott
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Thank you, Scott.
I very much liked what you did. (For some strange reason, my phone is not allowing me to comment on yours. When I get up later, will use the ‘puter!)
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Great! Can’t wait!
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