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Hide ‘n Seek – Friday Fictioneers

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Hide ‘N Seek

Simon and Jeffrey loved playing hide ‘n seek along the waterways. They delineated certain blocks, making sure they stayed within, otherwise they’d never find each other! So much fun, especially on delivery days. So many crates to hide in or behind. They played almost every weekend when the weather permitted.

It was Simon’s turn to count. “…97, 98, 99, 100. Ready or not, here I come!”

He ran between crates, laughing, “I’ll find you, Jeffrey!”

Suddenly Simon was scooped up and thrown into a box on a boat. The wind knocked out of him, he thought he heard a muffled sound behind him.

“Jeffrey?…”

131 thoughts on “Hide ‘n Seek – Friday Fictioneers

  1. Uh-oh, that game turned dark very quickly! My guess is foul play — that they’ve been kidnapped. But, to what purpose? So many ideas about what could be going on, but my hope is that they’ve started on an adventure.

  2. Q,

    I’m going to say Simon and Jeffrey were sold into child slavery and never seen again. But that’s just cheery old me talking . . . πŸ˜‰

    I love an ending you never see coming. The boys . . not so much. But it’s what I love to call artistic license. Sorry boys . . .

    Peaceless in crates

    • B,

      I’m afraid that is definitely a possibility…πŸ˜‰

      I’m glad you never see it coming. Good sign I did a decent job…

      Crates to be filled with love…

      • Who knows where they’re going to get shipped to. They might be shipped off to an Apple store to become indentured salespeople who work for their food and clothing (Ready Player One reference) or maybe . . if they’re really lucky, they’ll be adopted by Oprah.
        You did a much better than decent job, stop being so humble. 100 words, and you were able to flip the script like that? I’m sending you a “Brava” as I toast with my java . . .

        To crates filled with love . . .

        • Who knows indeed? Poor buggers if they do end up at Apple… or some schmatta biz in a dark, dank cave. The Oprah thing…unless she hears about this new ring…
          I do thank you! I wasn’t sure if I had foreshadowed it – so didn’t want to.
          Chin chin with our coffee cups!

          To cratefuls of love indeed…

          • I always thought it would’ve been cool if Apple’s main competition would’ve been named Orange. It just made sense to me, still does.
            Yeah no foreshadowing. I didn’t expect it. Which is impressive if you would’ve been writing long. When you consider the brevity with which you must conduct yourself? That there is discipline AND dynamite. Pretty effective combination if you ask me.

            Add a couple Cuban coffees to that crateful, why dontcha?

          • That would have been funny…
            Well now… I do thank you for such a great comment, sir… 100 words is way short so when I do manage to get what I want across, I am very chuffed πŸ˜‰

            Mmmm… anything sweet to go with the cafΓ©?

          • You always do a fantastic job with these. Always.
            Chuffed. Good word.
            Hmmmm. My mind is on cake now! Can’t imagine why . . .πŸ˜‚

          • Flavor? Hmm. Rum cake. If only because it’s the only way I can take rum. German chocolate. Tiramisu. Chocolate. Maple walnut. Banana walnut. Okay . . I’ll stop.

          • Yes. Flavour. Funny… rum in a cake is one of only places I don’t like it… as for the rest… hmmmm… I could make some of those happen πŸ˜‰

          • I never did like rum cake before. Not sure if I was just really hungry the last time I had it.
            I have failed my heritage by not being able to drink rum. Whatevs . . .;)

  3. Well now, I did think, if these were kids, which playing hide and seek they probably were, they could be toying with danger in that environment. Thank you, for at least hinting that I could be right. Poor kids. Pity the parents. Feel for their worries. Oh dear, I’m completing what you started, perhaps in innocence, with a far-from-innocent story. Drats to my dark mind.

  4. Oh Gosh … my emotional self says a tragic kidnapping. My sensible self wants to believe it’s a game. Intruguing story with suspense for the reader to decide which way it should go. Well written, Dale. I love where you went with the prompt photo.
    Izzy 😎

  5. I’m feeling optimistic, so I think one of the boatmen got fed up with the boys messing about on his barge. He’ll keep them in the crates for a couple of blocks then pop the crates on a wharf. As the lids are only held down by a full crate on top, the boys will soon be free!

  6. Hey, am I the only one who thinks they were just in the wrong place at the wrong time and were accidentally dispatched? I’m simply concerned about where they’re going and how they’re going to get home. Very well done, Dale.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

  7. Oh that’s horrible. Those kids were having such fun, and now one or both is kidnapped. Very well done – I’m sitting her frowning and wanting a follow-up to let me know they’re safe!

  8. Delivery men don’t seem to conjure up good thoughts in us do they? Chilling end, and I do hope that, Jeffrey escaped Simon’s fate and somehow plays a role in finding him again.

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